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Student Writing: Troubleshooting & Advice

2 November 2020

Session 6 Class A - 2nd November 2020

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  • This week's task is about writing microfiction
  • I want you to write a (very) short story which is only 100 words long. 
  • It must be EXACTLY 100 words, not including the title and your name. THIS IS A VERY STRICT RULE.
  • Do not submit 98 or 99 or 101 or 102 words!
  • Use WORD Counter.net to check the word count HERE.
  • The title can add some nuance or extra meaning. 
  • The story must have an Indonesian dimension: setting, character, perspective.
  • Have your Session 6 teammates check your grammar and punctuation before you submit it to me. 
  • The "best" SIXTEEN from EWS 2020 will be featured in a radio programme that will be broadcast in the UK in December but distributed to you next week.
  • I will issue a letter acknowledging your contribution to the show that you can stick in your portfolio.
Here are four examples:


TEXTS

The Photographic Record by Ian Hornett

Ellie didn't reach the spartan apartment until after the council had taken away the body of her mother's uncle. She'd never met him. She knew nothing about him but was nevertheless the only relative he had left, those in America for generations notwithstanding. He'd had no books. No paper, pens, no television, no creature comforts. Prim. Proper. Joyless. He had only three photos. One with siblings in 1940. A bleak one of him posing stiffly alone in 1959. And a 1972 picture, surveillance-like, him crossing a street, seen from an upstairs window. Was it taken by a lover? Elie wondered.

Ambushed by Jo Coldwell

I fell to the ground like a sack of sweet potatoes. The blood in my mouth tasted metallic and wicked. The pain was dull and everywhere. My vertical eyes peered through horizontal grass blades, tall, teeming greens, nostrils itched by their oniony scent, swaying slightly, dappling me with needles of blinding sun. I glimpsed the horror of a soldier's boots passing. My breathing stopped. Motionless and damp. Chest burning. Roaring silence. I wanted to sleep. Just surrender to the sleep. But I knew it'd be the end. However, as I have been able to describe all this, I obviously survived.

Snubbed by Yvonne Pini

The two geese spent all day shrieking as they reigned over the t-junction they’d commandeered in the middle of the otherwise quiet neighbourhood. Car drivers didn’t want to get out on that corner. Only if motorcyclists were speeding would they be left alone. Cyclists had to gird themselves and aim straight at the birds before escaping hell for leather. Pedestrians had to take a different route. Children didn’t play on that corner any more. The geese’s sullen owner had bought them having lost the election for head of the neighbourhood committee. He tossed goose feed onto the tarmac every morning.

New Promenade Hotel by Bill Lawrance

“There were millions of cockroaches”. No. Delete. Be more level-headed. “There were so many cockroaches.” No. Say “countless” instead. I typed. “There were countless cockroaches in my room.” The PC was on our reception desk. I read the whole thing back to myself. Almost ready to click on submit. I peered through the lobby window at the hotel across the road. Those Johnny-come-latelies thought they were so clever, taking our name, so tirelessly built-up and buffed, and putting the word New in front of it. Our occupancy fell by 20%. Wait till tourists read this, my latest anonymous online review.

More examples...


Cookbooks by Pamela Ennis

Patti was a voracious collector of cookbooks. At last count, there were 2,200 of them. Although she considered herself a self-taught gourmet, she had not yet cooked one recipe. Most nights she stood in the middle of her kitchen; cookbooks opened to dog-eared pages of dishes she yearned to try; cupboards opened, revealing their curious contents; and the expectant refrigerator door gaping too long for efficiency until she acknowledged that she lacked the ingredients for any of them. In the end, she always settled herself in, alone in front of the television, with her cheese sandwich and bowl of soup.

The Moderator by Louise Wolsey

The headstone would’ve been a chance to answer back without reprisal. A chance for revenge. A signal to a world that had been kept in the dark. Sharon, single, twice divorced, wanted “Here lies a capricious, malignant man”. Julia, mother of three, raising them alone, wanted “There were some happy moments but too few”. Elsie, hiding from her wifebeater ex, who was hiding from her tempestuous son, wanted “He taught me how a parent shouldn’t be”. The stonemason’s lethargic expressions had absorbed the siblings’ inclinations. They stood graveside, grim, motionless, dry-eyed. “Here lies John James, survived by three beautiful daughters”.

A Troubling Day by Paula Larcher

Something was troubling Malcolm. He had awoken to a letter from his wife, telling him that she was leaving him, and on the way to work his car was written off in a multiple pileup on the motorway. At lunchtime, Kylie from credit – control informed him that she was pregnant with his child after the works Christmas party, and on the way home, he was set upon by robbers and his wallet and credit cards were stolen. Then, in the evening it finally dawned upon him what had been bothering him; all day long he’d been thinking it was Thursday.   

Shameless by Yvonne Pini

The family had to face it: she was a thief. She felt no guilt about it.  Wasn’t it just opportunism? If something was there to be taken, someone else didn’t want it. If she did, she took it. No equivocation or compunction. Of course, she was sometimes caught, and punished, but remained undeterred. Devoid of conscience or empathy, impervious to opprobrium, she had neither life goals nor morality to guide her. Yet those who knew her did not judge her harshly. That’s just how she is, they’d say indulgently.  What do you expect? Unapologetic, She yawned, stretched languorously and purred. 

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  1. Am I Alone? By Tyrone Ezekiel

    The day marked 28 days ever since the virus outbreak. Jake strolled around the empty streets of Jakarta. Jake was convinced he was the last person alive. He just knew deep inside that he was likely the only person who thought about hiding on one of Jakarta’s skyscraper rooftops ever since news emerged about the virus. He acted too soon; he survived, yet he survived alone. He walked back to his house in Senayan and sat on a chair, preparing for the lonely and solitary future that lies ahead of him - when suddenly, there was a knock at the door.

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    2. Am I Alone? By Tyrone Ezekiel

      The day marked 28 days ever since the virus outbreak. Jake strolled around the empty streets of Jakarta. Jake was convinced he was the last person alive. He knew deep inside that he was likely the only person who thought about hiding on one of Jakarta’s skyscraper rooftops ever since news emerged about the virus. He acted too soon; he survived, yet he survived alone. He walked back to his house in Senayan and sat on a chair, preparing for the lonely and solitary future that lies ahead of him - when suddenly, there was a knock at the door.

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    3. The day marked 28 DAYS SINCE the virus outbreak. Jake strolled around the empty streets of Jakarta. HE was convinced he was the last person alive. He knew deep inside that he was likely the only person WHO’D thought OF hiding on one of THE CITY’S skyscraper rooftops ever since news emerged about the virus. He acted too soon; he survived, yet he survived alone. He walked back to his house in Senayan and sat on a chair, preparing for the lonely and solitary future that LAY ahead of him - when suddenly, there was a knock at the door.

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  2. Things We Lost by Chiraz Yunianto

    Feeling the sand between my toes and looking at the shore from my island, Bali, I wonder “Are they ever going to come back?”. Bali is our home... at least it used to be. The four of us agreed to part ways after what happened that night, but we said that in ten years, after everything had settled down, we would come back to this spot. To this beach. I’ve been walking here for hours on end, searching for familiar faces that I’ve waited for years. I thought to myself, “Should I keep waiting? Or should I just give up?”

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    2. Things We Lost by Chiraz

      Feeling the sand between my toes and looking at the shore from my island, Bali, I WONDERED, “Are they ever going to come back? BALI IS OUR HOME” ...at least it used to be. The four of us agreed to part ways after what happened that night, but we said that in ten years, after everything had settled down, we would come back to this spot. To this beach. I’D been walking here for hours on end, searching for familiar faces that I’ve AWAITED for years. I thought to myself, “Should I keep waiting? Or should I just give up?”

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  3. The Worst Month of The Year by Adhisakti Sahasrara Nugroho

    On the twilight night of October, I return to my 'Kos', a small Indonesian apartment, after a long day of college. Planning to relax and unwind, I wash myself. It felt eerily calm. After changing into a pair of comfy boxers, and placing myself into my snuggly bed, my Gen-z mind immediately thought "YouTube". Next, I thought "Damn, I'm hungry". So, with my trusty food delivery app, I requested fried chicken from my nearest fast food restaurant. “Perfect,” I felt, until I heard it, 'Tick-tock,' the clock struck midnight, November first, finally it dawned on me, the time has come.

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    2. The Worst Month of The Year by Sakti

      DURING the twilight night of October, I RETURNED to my 'Kos', a small Indonesian apartment, after a long day of college. Planning to relax and unwind, I WASHED myself. It felt eerily calm. After changing into a pair of comfy boxers, and placing myself IN my snuggly bed, my Gen-z mind immediately thought "YouTube". Next, I thought "Damn, I'm hungry". So, with my trusty food delivery app, I requested fried chicken from my nearest fast food restaurant. “Perfect,” I felt, until I heard it, 'Tick-tock,' the clock struck midnight, November first, finally it dawned on me, the time HAD come.

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  4. Helpless by Excel Verrellino

    “I barely made it again this month.” Fahrul said to himself. The thought of working to the bone for mere scraps of food and money haunts him. Living off of instant noodles and week old vegetables to fulfill his body’s nutrients, there wasn’t much of him other than bones anyway. “Lord have mercy,” he prayed, adding to the queue of millions of unheard prayers. Living in a land where the rich get richer and become parasites to the poor. An unavoidable fate tied by the circumstances with no power to change it. The fate of millions of lives in Indonesia

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    2. Helpless by Excel

      “I barely made it again this month.” Fahrul said to himself. The thought of working FINGERS to the bone for mere scraps of food and money HAUNTED him. Living off of instant noodles and week-old vegetables to PROVIDE his body’s nutrients, there wasn’t much of him other than bones anyway. “Lord have mercy,” he prayed, adding to the queue of millions of unheard prayers. Living in a land where the rich get richer and become parasites ON the poor. An unavoidable fate tied by the circumstances with no power to change it. The fate of millions of lives in Indonesia.

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  5. Be Educated by Ivan Aptarafi Setyandito

    A tiny man walked into a classroom in his worn bag. His manner dazed, his voice hoarse and low. Still, the blackboard is blank. An old woman with glasses looked with pity at the class. Fifteen minutes, the remnants of all night's study, he wrote fluently on the outworn blackboard in twenty lines of sentences. It is difficult to comprehend formulas. Suddenly, he broke the white chalk he was using, the last chalk. He turned to his still rowdy friends, then looked down at the ground, then looked over at the clouds above him. God, he thought, is not cruel.

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    2. Be Educated by Ivan

      A SLEEP-DEPRIVED STUDENT walked into THE classroom in WITH his worn bag. His manner dazed, his voice hoarse and low. Still, the blackboard WAS blank. An old woman with glasses looked with pity at the class. Fifteen minutes, the PRODUCT of STUDYING ALL NIGHT, he wrote fluently on the WORN-OUT blackboard: SENTENCES IN twenty lines. COMPREHENDING THE formulas was difficult. Suddenly, he broke the white chalk HE’D BEEN using: the last chalk. He turned to his still rowdy friends, then looked down at the ground, AND then looked UP at the clouds above him. God, he thought, is not cruel.

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  6. Rights Fighter by Aditya Ahmad Rafi

    It is another hectic day, he woke up early in the morning to prepare for his another fight. not forgetting his prayers before go. Assembling with the other rights fighter before uttering protests in front of the parliament building. Day to day the protests were done, many aspirations were expressed there, but those are still not enough action to change the policymaker's mind about their policy decisions. Where are our rights to be heard? What is the benefit of choosing the council if we just ended up silenced? Peacefully expressing our disagreement will rarely be heard, therefore chaos often occurs.

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    2. Rights Fighter by Adi

      It WAS another hectic day. HE woke up early in the morning to prepare FOR THE STRUGGLE AGAIN. HE DIDN’T FORGET his prayers before GOING AND assembling with the other rights ACTIVISTS before CHANTING protests in front of the parliament building. Day to day the protests were done, many aspirations were expressed there, but THAT WAS still not enough action to change the policymaker's mind about THEIR DECISIONS. Where WOULD our DEMANDS be heard? What WAS the benefit of ELECTING the council if we just ended up silenced? Peacefully expressing our disagreement will rarely be heard, therefore chaos often occurs

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  7. The Right Decision by Elaine Kezia

    Cold sweat was dripping down his forehead as he ran as fast as he could. The sight of that deep crimson fluid flowing down from his father’s lifeless body was still so vividly engraved inside his head. How was it not? His white t-shirt bled the exact same shade. Quickly, he took a glance back at the place he used to call home, smiling half-heartedly knowing he did what he had to. His father was an ojek driver who loved playing with small innocent children a little too much. This is for them, he thought as he continued his escape.

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    2. The Right Decision by Elaine

      Cold sweat was dripping down his forehead as he ran as fast as he could. The sight of that deep crimson fluid FLOWING FROM his father’s lifeless body was still so vividly engraved inside his MIND. How COULD it not BE? His white t-shirt bled the exact same shade., He glanced QUICKLY back at the place he used to call home, smiling half-heartedly, knowing HE’D DONE what he had to. His father HAD BEEN A MOTORCYCLE TAXI driver who loved playing with small innocent children a little too much. This is for them, he thought, as he continued his escape.

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  8. Gamelan by Fransisco Martua

    Her passion has always been in music. Gamelan to be specific, is the instrument she plays as her family embraced a rich Javanese culture. She practised with her friend together every day. Ajeng told her mother that they were doing it for a competition. She invited her mother to watch them compete. The day arrived. Ajeng left her house early wearing a kemben. Her mother watched, confused, as she played alone in the middle of an empty stage, bowing to a room of no audience. Ajeng walked down the alley with a smile and asked,” Did you hear the crowd?”

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    2. Gamelan by Fransisco

      Her passion has always been FOR music. Gamelan, to be specific, is the instrument she plays as her family embraced THE RICH CULTURE OF JAVA. She practised TOGETHER with her friend every day. Ajeng told her mother that they were PREPARING for a competition. She invited her mother to watch them compete. The day arrived. Ajeng left her house early wearing a BATIK WRAP. Her CONFUSED mother watched as she played alone in the middle of an empty stage AND BOWED to a NON-EXISTENT audience. Ajeng walked down the AISLE with a smile and asked, “Did you hear THAT crowd?”

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  9. Hopeless by Jeremy Pradhana Subiakto

    Driving through the endless night, we stopped on a red light. Lots of young boys and girls are begging for money on the side of the street, playing their ukulele and singing as the car goes by. Their faces looked hopeless and tired, as if not knowing where to go when the rain started pouring. They run as fast as they could to seek the nearest haven. I reach out to those kids as fast as I could to give them food and money, knowing the harsh truth that the money I gave them would no longer be their’s tomorrow.

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    2. Hopeless by Jeremy

      Driving through the endless night, we stopped AT a red light. Lots of young boys and girls WERE begging for money on the side of the ROAD, playing their ukuleles and singing as OUR car PULLED UP. THE rain started pouring and, not knowing where to go, their faces looked hopeless and tired. BUT they RAN as fast as they could to seek the nearest SHELTER. I reached out to those kids as fast as I could to give them food and money, knowing the harsh truth that the money I WAS GIVING them would no longer be their’s tomorrow.

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  10. What if Prabowo Had won the 2019 election?
    By Muhammad Dzulfikar Farkhan

    Things would be much different if Prabowo won the 2019 election. Most likely, Jokowi’s prodigious coalition will be shattered. The opposition will not only consist of PKS, there will be another opposition like PDIP or GOLKAR. The Islamic organization, Front Pembela Islam, will have much more power if Prabowo won the election. Habib Rizieq will finally return to Indonesia. Prabowo also will not become the ministry of defense. One key question is, can Prabowo better handle the spread of the COVID-19 pandemic in Indonesia if he won the election. Is there any different way of how Prabowo manages the pandemic?

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    2. What if Prabowo Had won? by Farkhan

      Things WOULD’VE BEEN VERY different if Prabowo HAD won the 2019 election. Most likely, Jokowi’s prodigious coalition WOULD be shattered. The opposition WOULD not only consist of PKS, there WOULD be OTHER opposition like PDIP or GOLKAR. The Islamic organization, Front Pembela Islam, WOULD have much more power if Prabowo WAS IN POWER. Habib Rizieq WOULD finally return to Indonesia. Prabowo also WOULD not BE the MINISTER of defense. One key question: COULD Prabowo better handle the spread of the COVID-19 pandemic in Indonesia if HE’D won the election. How WOULD Prabowo HAVE MANAGED the pandemic IN ANY DIFFERENT WAY?

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  11. Regret by Gabriel Elvandy Dondokambey

    Supratno froze as he saw the parliament office ambushed by countless college students. He could only stand stiffly amidst the chaos. It has been years since the last time he saw him. Tears fell down - all the way to his chin. Mind filled with shame and guilt, he should’ve put down his ego. But it’s too late. As Indonesian flags swung high in the air, followed by shouts of reformation, Supratno realized: it’s time. As his old man and the board members were herded out, he closed his eyes and prayed to the almighty God, “Please, save his life.”

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    2. Regret by Gabriel

      Supratno froze as he saw the parliament office ATTACKED by countless college students. He could only stand stiffly amidst the chaos. It has been years since he had last seen him. Tears POURED down, all the way to his chin. HIS mind filled with shame and guilt, he should’ve CONTROLLED his ego. But it WAS too late. As Indonesian flags swung high in the air, followed by shouts of “reformation!”, Supratno realized: it WAS time. As his old man and the board members were herded out, he closed his eyes and prayed to the almighty God, “Please, save MY life.”

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  12. Cannibal by Akira Resta Hartono

    It was an evening in January 2003, Sumanto was wandering around the graveyard. He was on a quest to eat seven humans to gain a supernatural power. He was looking for Mbah Rinah's tomb. After he had found it, he dug the grave bare handedly. He then brought the corpse by bicycle to his house which is 1,7 km away. He started skinning then eating the leg of Mbah Rinah in his house until the next morning. Unfortunately for him, in the morning, the police had found his wickedness. He confessed that he had eaten other two humans in Lampung.

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    2. Cannibal by Akira

      It was an evening in January 2003. Sumanto was wandering around the graveyard. He was on a quest to eat seven CORPSES to gain a supernatural power. He was looking for Mbah Rinah's tomb. After he had found it, he EXUMED HER WITH HIS BARE HANDS. He then brought the corpse by bicycle to his house, 1.7 km away. He started skinning then eating the leg of Mbah Rinah in his house until the next morning. Unfortunately for him, in the morning, the police had DISCOVERED his wickedness. He confessed that he had eaten other two humans in Lampung.

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  13. "Resonance" by Anissa Hadi

    The sound of the car door closing jolted April back to reality.

    “Ready for Bandung?” Dan said as he shuffled around in his seat.

    They chose to leave early so they wouldn’t have to face traffic. With the sun not having quite made its way over the horizon and the emptiness of the usually-bustling streets, April felt as if she was in a dream.

    Dan started the car’s engine, breaking the silence of the morning and April’s peaceful state of mind.

    Loud noises still caused her irrational fear. Would she ever be able to feel differently after the incident?

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    2. April was jolted by the sound of the car door. She had been ruminating over the incident again.

      “Ready for Bandung?” Dan said, shuffling into his seat.

      They were leaving early so they wouldn’t have to face traffic. The sun hadn’t quite peaked over the horizon and the usually-bustling streets were empty. April felt like she was in a dream.

      Dan started the engine, breaking the silence of the morning and snapping April out of her trance.

      Loud noises still caused her irrational fear. Would the trauma she was burdened by ever go away? Would she always feel this way?

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    3. Resonance by Nissa

      *April was jolted by the sound of the car door. SHE’D been ruminating over the incident again. “Ready for Bandung?” Dan said, shuffling into his seat. They were leaving early so THEY’D NOT face TOO MUCH traffic. The sun hadn’t quite peaked over the horizon and the usually-bustling streets were empty. April felt like she was in a dream. Dan started the engine, breaking the silence of the morning and snapping April out of her trance. Loud noises still caused her irrational fear. Would the IMAGE OF THOSE TROOPS RANSACKING HER HOUSE ever FADE? Would she always feel this way?*

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    4. Note: this final part (second last sentence) is just a suggestion. Something like this – of your choice - would be a good ‘payoff’ to insinuate something specific after mentioning “the incident” at the beginning.

      Others:

      Would the IMAGE OF HER FATHER CHOKING HER MOTHER ever FADE?

      Would the IMAGE OF WHAT’D HAPPENED TO HER DOG ever FADE?

      Would the IMAGE OF THEY’D DONE TO HER DOG ever FADE?

      Would the IMAGE OF HER UNCLE’S SILHOUETTE IN THE DOORWAY ever FADE? (This would need a word snipped earlier: “…so THEY’D NOT face MUCH traffic.”

      Would the IMAGE OF HER STEPFATHER’S SILHOUETTE IN THE DOORWAY ever FADE? (This would also need a word snipped earlier: “…so THEY’D NOT face MUCH traffic.”

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  14. The Musician by Dzaky Taufiqulhakim

    It has been about 20 years since the last time he played, it was at Gelora Bung Karno Stadium, in front of tens of thousands of concertgoers. One day, while cleaning his garage, he caught a glimpse of the unmistakable orange burst of a ’58 Gibson Les Paul. He moved a few boxes away, and there it was, in the exact same condition as he left it. He plugged it in to his old Marshall amplifier, and before he knows it, his fingers started to dance along the fretboard like the good old days. His face was beaming with smile.

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    2. The Musician by Dzaky

      It has been about 20 years since the last time HE’D played; it was at Gelora Bung Karno Stadium, in front of tens of thousands of concertgoers. One day, while cleaning his garage, he caught a glimpse of the unmistakable orange burst of a ’58 Gibson Les Paul. He moved a few boxes away, and there it was: in the exact same condition as HE’D left it. He plugged it INTO his old Marshall amplifier, and before he KNEW it, his fingers started to dance along the fretboard like the good old days. His face was beaming with a smile.

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  15. "To Be Young Is a Place So Far Away" By Arundati Warastika

    A figure arose from the distance of Mt. Merapi, galloping towards Ayu Hadiningrat as she waited. A soft smile plastered over Jaya Mangkunegaran as he came to a halt beside Ayu. The unbearable echoing in the distance as a gunshot fired. Dismounting their horses, Jaya took her hand as they rushed towards the ship. Pirates. Jaya pointed his fingers, blasting the large pirate blocking our entrance. "Take us to your captain," Jaya commanded. Ayu gazed at the unconscious pirate, placing her tiara into his hands as they passed. Crew members whispered and stared. The captain- evidently startled, bowed. "Your Majesty."

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    2. To Be Young Is a Place So Far Away by Arundati

      A figure arose from the distance of Mount Merapi, galloping towards Ayu Hadiningrat as she waited. A soft smile LIT UP Jaya Mangkunegaran’s FACE as he came to a halt beside Ayu: AN UNBEARABLE ECHO in the distance as a gunshot fired. Dismounting their horses, Jaya took her hand as they rushed towards the ship. Pirates. Jaya pointed his fingers, blasting the LARGEST ONE blocking our entrance. "Take us to your captain," Jaya commanded. Ayu gazed at the unconscious pirate, placing her tiara IN his HAND as they passed. Crew members whispered and stared. The captain, CLEARLY startled, bowed. "Your Majesty."

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  16. “Greed for Riches” by Zhafirah Zhafarina

    A series of unfortunate events happened to Saka, an ex-multimillionaire who chose to live far away from the crowd. Saka was daydreaming on his paddy field hut. Suddenly, there’s an old man dressed in all black, with a keris, and a blangkon on his head. Saka was confused because he didn’t know where the old man came from. “ I know a shaman who can reverse your situation as before,” the old man whispered, smiling to Saka. “ Look around you, there are people who are meditating for a treat.” Carelessly, Saka agreed and followed where the old man went.

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    2. Greed for Riches by Zhafirah

      A series of unfortunate events happened to Saka, an ex-multimillionaire who chose to live far away from the crowd. SHE was daydreaming IN his FARMER’S hut. Suddenly, THERE WAS an old man dressed ALL IN black, with a DAGGER, and a BATIK blangkon on his head. Saka was CONFUSED; HE didn’t know where the old man HAD COME from. “I know a shaman who can RESTORE your situation TO WHAT IT WAS,” the SMILING old man whispered. “Look around you, there are people meditating AND PRAYING FOR GREATER RICHES.” Carelessly, Saka agreed and followed where the old man LED HIM.

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  17. Joko is a well-known person in Banyu Wangi. Famous by his ability to use magic power, that he often uses to disturb people. Joko learned to master many supernatural powers by his master which was an evil shaman. Joko always uses his power for violence that prejudice people in his village. Many people don’t like him because of his attitude. Some people agreed to take revenge. They find an idea to take all Joko’s power. They tell Joko to find a magical fruit to gained power. Joko was tricked by the people. Joko lost his power after eating the fruit.

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    2. The title: Blinded by Power

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    3. Blinded By Power by Bima

      Joko WAS a well-known person in Banyu Wangi: famous FOR his ability to use magic power, often IN A WAY THAT DISTURBED people. HE learned to master many supernatural powers FROM his master WHO was an evil shaman. Joko always USED his power for violence AGAINST people in his village. Many people DIDN’T like him because of his attitude. Some people agreed to take revenge. They HAD A PLAN to take AWAY all Joko’s POWERS. They TOLD HIM to find a magical fruit to gain power. HE was tricked by the people AND lost his power after eating the fruit.

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  18. Malin Kundang the Disobedience Child by Zahra Nurhikmah

    There once a boy named Malin Kundang, lived with his mother. One day, Malin asked for his mother permission to look for a better job, to fix their economy. With his mother grace, Malin went off. He became a sailor and indeed he became wealthy, but he never come back to see his mother. As his mother came to visit, Malin was embarrassed and pretend to not recognize his mother and called her, "filthy woman!". That broke his mother's heart, "Your heart is like a stone!". A storm came and a thunder zap towards Malin and he became a stone.

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    2. Malin Kundang the DISOBEDIENT Child by Zahra

      There WAS once a boy named Malin Kundang WHO lived with his mother. One day, Malin asked his MOTHER’S permission to FIND a better job to fix their economy. With his MOTHER’S grace, Malin went off. He became a sailor and, indeed, became wealthy, but he never CAME back to see his mother. As his mother VISITED HIM, Malin was embarrassed and PRETENDED to not recognize HER and SIMPLY SHOUTED, "filthy woman!". THIS broke HER heart, "Your heart is like a stone!" SHE CRIED. THEN, A storm came and a BOLT OF LIGHTNING STRUCK Malin, TURNING HIM INTO a stone.

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  19. “Water Drops Pierce Stones”

    Once lived a 15 years old boy named Rudy. He lived in a village ruled by an evil king named Jamal. King Jamal often enslave and forced people to work without payment. Unlike any other boy, he prefer to stay inside and learn new things rather than play outside with his friends. One day Rudy decided to speak up and fight for the village. After years of suffer, he finally managed to seize power from the king. He restored faith in humanity, and the villagers finally live their life in peace. Rudy has now became the king of the village.

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    2. Water Drops Pierce Stones by Adam

      THERE once lived a 15-year-old boy named Rudy. He lived in a village ruled by an evil king named Jamal. THE KING often ENSLAVED PEOPLE AND FORCED THEM to work without payment. Unlike any other boy, he PREFERRED to stay inside and learn new things rather than play outside with his friends. One day Rudy decided to speak up and fight for HIS FELLOW VILLAGERS. After years of suffering, he finally managed to seize power from KING JAMAL. He restored faith in humanity, and the villagers finally LIVED their LIVES in peace. Rudy IS now the king of the village.

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